It was a dark and stormy night. We were in the car we had been driving for 3 hour it was just Me and Mace. We were going to Dunedin. we came across an abandoned jail, it was misty and quiet. We cut a hole in the fence and went into the jail. It was cold. I felt a warmth coming towards me. I told Mace to look behind me. He said “there was nothing”. I didn't believe him. but we kept walking. Mace said “do you wanna go check out the death chamber”. I said “sure why not”. We were walking down the hall. I looked down and there was a stain. It was someone's ashes and blood. We kept walking. we got to the stairs. We walked down them and we got to the death chamber. there was a door like what you see at the bank. We opened it and he dared me to sit in it. so i was sitting in the death cheer for like 3 minutes. our flash lights stopped working. I looked at Mace. He had a look of fear on his face. I slowly looked behind me. There was a dark figure standing there. I got up and we started to run. we were going up the stairs. Then a black figure appeared. It had wings and horns. we sat down in fear, we didn't know what to do. There were screams of fear and crying coming from the figure. we were blocking our ears. we could still hear it. We were praying for life. Then we looked up and it was gone. We got up and started running. We got to the sales, we kept running, we got to the car and got in and drove off speeding. we got to Dunedin, we got to the house we went inside. It was nice and warm. we explored, my room was the best, maces one was the little one. we didn't sleep, the next day we tried to find out what that play was. we never found out. people broke out and killed the guards and the other prisoners. Nobody survived. It was so bad but. me and mace lived happily ever after. then Mace got shot in the head 39 times then he died. the end.
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Ki ora Reggie ,I like The dicription.For we at the start of a sentance it is We it has a capital and I think you should but less fullstops.If your gonna bring up somthing else put a commor ",".
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